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There is a ghost doing handstands on my front lawn,
wrist-deep in fresh soil. Her hands are birds
in flight.

It's late, but no one comes to take her home.
The pale moon offers a silver smile -
the clouds disapprove.
Too tired to dream, she buries her legs in sky.

Tonight she is invincible, untouchable,
this frail girl beneath the stars
this death in light.

-

There is a ghost doing handstands on my front lawn,
falling to her white knees. Her stare is a pane
of glass.

The eyes of the living are often murky but
the eyes of the gone
are windows.
;
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Daily Deviation

Given 2014-07-07
Simple language evokes deep melancholy in Visitor by sliverofciel. ( Featured by neurotype )
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HylianWarrior Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Just came across this. The first line caught my eye right away. Very rare for me!

It's a beautiful piece, so surreal and lovely. Nice job. :)
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TheRedEyedRaven Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
No words needed, save for one : Perfect 
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ShadowNaryu Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
 I like how you created just perfect images so we could get a picture in our minds that's happening and that your poem sounds really good
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naikki Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014
Poignant. Great work!
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is so great, I don't know where to start, just frickin' beautiful.
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Demon57 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Exquisite poem.
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IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Student Writer
I....don't know exactly where my love for this poem ends. It keeps soaring. I keep wanting more of it. This poem is an experience. I feel like I know her. I like how spiritual this is. I like that it lacks the haunted-ness that I assumed would follow a girl-ghost around when a human is writing about her. It's like I'm seeing her through the eyes of something that knows. 

A well-deserved daily deviation, I'd say. :heart: 
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Wisp-on-Paper Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
^ I concur.
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Cole-y Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014
really immensely brilliant
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KakaSakuObessive Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'll admit that I don't usually like poetry.  But stuff like this....  You just HAVE to like it.  It's deep, haunting, and well-written.  The kind of thing you want framed and hung in your living room for everyone to see. 
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SycamoreSea Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh gosh, the images in this are just outstanding... congratulations on a much-deserved DD, I have shivers from reading this. 
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Beltaneh Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014
Beautiful piece of poetry. The images you created are quite impressive and vivid
Congrats on the DD
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Mooyi Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Student Writer
very interesting work :) enjoyed reading it
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Kagamiaoi Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Student Writer
Wow, this was quite impressive in its short briefness. Good job you deserve the daily deviation. :3  
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TheWeeLad Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014
This piece had me looking out upon a front lawn (not mine i'm sure) and seeing some queer looking spirit doing something peculiar... you had me in the place seeing the story unfold.

Good job.
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LeftUnfinished Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful. :heart: 
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wordeea Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
beautiful. love the last stanza
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jcpeters726 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. 'eyes like windows'. such descriptive writing!
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PoeticWar Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014   Writer
There is a ghost doing handstands on my front lawn, 
wrist-deep in fresh soil. Her hands are birds
in flight.

Surely if the ghost is wrist-deep in soil her hands are quite far from being in any sense birds in flight? The logic of the image suggests, instead, they are, likewise, buried in the earth. 
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HeartOfTheStorm Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014   General Artist
Whoa, such beautiful writing and very thought provoking. ^^
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CrystalTearz55 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful
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Marusska Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
this is amazing.
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012
This is pure gorgeousness. Gah, I'm jealous. <3
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vespera Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"she buries her legs in sky" I love this part!
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012
i just feel like stewing in the last stanza for hours
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sliverofciel Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012
Haha, it's my favorite. <3
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blackandwhite-panda Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012

I adore this. Thank you.
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sliverofciel Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012
No, thank you.
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blackandwhite-panda Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012

(:
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jennedy Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012   Writer
this is so haunting and beautiful. thank you so much.
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sliverofciel Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012
Thank you. <3
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